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CLOSING TIME


By the time the Lucky Lady Lounge decided it had had enough of the day, it was well past midnight and pretending not to notice. The neon out front still buzzed like a cicada with a nicotine habit, but inside the place had gone thin and hollow, the way bars do when they’re finished with everybody except the people who aren’t finished with them.

Fort Stockton weeknights have a way of declaring victory early. By eleven, the jukebox starts to sound embarrassed for itself. By midnight, the stools empty in a hurry, as if there’s a curfew nobody remembers agreeing to. What’s left is the hum of refrigeration, the sticky shine of the bar top, and the faint smell of spilled beer that no amount of mopping ever quite defeats.

Hank was behind the bar, polishing a glass that didn’t need it, his attention split between the iPad docked near the register and the two holdouts at the counter. The latest Bring a Trailer podcast was coming through the speakers loud enough to reach the parking lot, Alex, Randy, and the crew bouncing their way through auction listings and adjectives like they were being paid by the syllable.

They probably were.

“TOTALLY!” Alex said, voice crackling through the speaker.

Hank’s eyes flicked sideways.

Chad, still wearing his green Piggly Wiggly apron like it was formal attire, groaned and reached for the bottle. He poured the shot with the careful precision of a man who had already gone past caring and was now focused solely on accuracy. He knocked it back, winced, and set the glass down with a thud. Then he threw his three bucks down for the shot.

Rusty Hammer laughed, a gravelly sound that came from decades of sawdust, whiskey, and being unimpressed.

“Rookie mistake,” Rusty said. “You gotta pace yourself.”

“I was pacing myself,” Chad said. “Then Alex delivered the word ‘totally.’”

From the speaker: “—and the stance on this FJ 40 is RAD.”

Hank didn’t even look up this time. Rusty sighed, squared his shoulders, and poured his own shot. He lifted it in a mock toast toward the speaker.

“Randy,” he said solemnly, “you’re gonna kill me.”

He drank. Then he paid up.



The Lucky Lady had learned, over the years, that nothing loosened wallets like friendly competition mixed with repetitive California colloquialisms. The jukebox still made its quarters, sure, but the BaT podcast drinking game had turned into a reliable revenue stream. Hank had tried it once as a joke. Then it started paying the light bill every month. Eventually it covered the rent every month, as well, and paid for the new ice machine.

By the end of the episode, Chad’s laughter had turned loose and indiscriminate, the kind that started before the joke and finished long after. Rusty sat heavier on his stool, elbows planted like outriggers, eyes narrowed in that familiar hardware-store squint that suggested deep thought or shallow irritation—it was often hard to tell which.

Outside, the streetlight in the parking lot flickered and steadied, casting its pale cone over a single car parked crookedly near the curb.

Rusty noticed it the way some men notice storms—without meaning to, and all at once.

He turned on his stool, slow and deliberate, peering through the front window past the smudges and decals and the reflection of the neon beer signs. The car sat there like it knew it was being watched.

A 1968 Camaro coupe. Blue, with white stripes that ran the length of it like a declaration. Rally wheels catching the light just enough to look proud. Wide Oval tires planted and patient. It didn’t belong to anyone inside, not this late, not on a weeknight.

Rusty leaned forward, forearms on the bar.

“Well I’ll be damned,” he said.



Chad followed his gaze, blinking as if the glass might swim away if he looked too fast.

“That’s a car,” Chad said, helpfully.

“That’s that car,” Rusty said.

Hank glanced up. “Don’t touch it.”

“I ain’t touching it,” Rusty said. “I’m remembering it.”

Chad squinted. “You know that car?”

“I knew a girl who drove one just like it.”

That did it. Chad straightened, or tried to, which amounted to a rearrangement of limbs and ambition.

“Oh,” he said. “Here we go.”

Rusty didn’t rise to it. He kept his eyes on the Camaro, the way a man looks at a photograph he doesn’t own anymore.

“Long time ago,” he said. “Different town. I was younger. Dumber. Thought I knew what I was doing.”

Chad snorted. “What changed?”

Rusty smiled thinly. “The town.”

Hank turned the podcast down a notch, just enough to let the story breathe.

“I was at a bar,” Rusty went on. “By myself. Not lonely. Just didn’t feel like going home yet. That ever happen to you?”

Chad nodded too enthusiastically. “Every Tuesday.”

“This girl starts talking to me,” Rusty said. “Friendly enough. Pretty. Persistent. I wasn’t rude, but I wasn’t interested. Kept it casual. You know the drill.”

“I do not,” Chad said. “But I admire it.”

“Across the bar,” Rusty said, “there’s this woman watching us. Not obvious. Just…present. Like she’d already decided something and was waiting for it to catch up.”

Chad leaned in, elbows sliding on the bar. “Uh-huh.”

“A few minutes go by,” Rusty said, “and she walks over, puts her hand on my arm like it belongs there, and says, ‘Sorry, baby, there was a line.’ Then she kisses me on the cheek.”

Chad let out a low whistle.

“She says it loud enough for the other girl to hear,” Rusty added. “‘Let’s go home.’”

“And?”

“And the other girl left,” Rusty said. “Just like that.”

Hank chuckled. “Efficient.”

“I figured she was bluffing,” Rusty said. “Doing me a favor. So I thanked her. Offered to buy her a drink.”

“And?” Chad pressed.

Rusty finally turned back from the window. His eyes were bright now, sharpened by memory and liquor.

“She looked me up and down,” he said, “smirked, and said, ‘I thought we were going home?’”

Chad slapped the bar. “No.”

“It took me about two and a half seconds,” Rusty said, “to realize this was never about saving me from anything.”

He paused, letting the silence do some of the work.

“She had a Camaro,” he said. “Just like that one. Same color. Same stripes. Same sound when she turned the key—like it was clearing its throat before saying something important.”

Chad laughed softly. “Go on.”

“They smelled like gasoline and perfume inside,” Rusty said. “Radio didn’t work. Didn’t matter. We talked the whole way. Nothing heavy. Just…everything.”

Hank busied himself with the register, giving them the courtesy of pretending not to listen.

“Her place was a studio at the Alamo Arms,” Rusty said. “Bare floors. One good lamp. Records stacked like they were still deciding where they belonged. We drank cheap wine and said things we probably wouldn’t have said sober.”

Chad grinned. “And then?”

Rusty’s smile turned private. “Then the night did what nights do when you stop trying to manage them.”

He didn’t stop there. He couldn’t. Not once the picture had formed.



He talked about the Camaro first—the way it smelled inside, vinyl and faint gasoline and something sweeter he didn’t yet have a name for. How she drove with one hand loose on the wheel and the other already telling him things her mouth hadn’t caught up to yet. How every red light felt like an insult, every green one a promise. She laughed at his jokes like she’d been waiting all night for someone worth laughing with, and when she leaned across the console it wasn’t hurried or clumsy or nervous—it was deliberate, practiced confidence, the kind that makes a man forget his own last name.

The studio apartment at the Alamo Arms was small enough that the door barely closed behind them before the night tipped sideways. No pretense. No easing in. Just heat meeting heat, like both of them had been walking around all evening wound too tight and finally found the right hands to undo it. He remembered the way the window was cracked open, the hum of traffic below, the glow of the streetlight slicing the room into gold and shadow. He remembered how she pulled him close like she’d already decided this wasn’t a one-night story, even if neither of them had said it out loud yet. How everything about her said stay long before the word ever came into play.

He paused then, staring into his glass like it might show him the room again if he looked hard enough. Thirty-eight years hadn’t dulled it—not the hunger, not the tenderness that followed it, not the way passion settled into something steadier and deeper by morning. It was still there, that first night, humming under his skin like a live wire. The kind of memory that doesn’t fade so much as wait.

That’s when Chad cleared his throat.

“I thought it’d be a one-time thing,” Rusty said finally. “It wasn’t.”

Chad raised his eyebrows. “No?”

“We’ve been together thirty-eight years,” Rusty said. “Married thirty-six.”

He lifted his glass, empty now, and set it down with care.

“Turns out,” he said, “sometimes the line really was there.”

For a moment, the Lucky Lady was quiet except for the hum of the cooler and the faint echo of the podcast, still droning on about hammer prices and provenance.

Chad cleared his throat.

“Well,” he said, “that’s hard to top.”

Rusty glanced at him. “You don’t have to.”

Chad shook his head, grinning with the reckless confidence of the thoroughly overserved.

“No,” he said. “I do.”

Hank sighed and poured two waters without being asked.

Chad took a breath. “Misspent youth,” he began. “I was dating a set of twins.”

Rusty blinked. “At the same time.”

“Yes,” Chad said proudly. “People used to ask how I could tell them apart.”

Hank muttered, “Oh Lord.”

“It was easy,” Chad said. “Once you knew how.”

Rusty waited.

“Kate had a beauty spot on her right cheek,” Chad said. “And Steve had a moustache.”

There was a beat.

Then Hank laughed so hard he had to grab the bar. Rusty’s laughter followed, deep and unrestrained, the kind that shook loose years of carefully stored opinions.

Chad sat back, satisfied.

Outside, the Camaro sat quietly under the streetlight, patient as ever, holding its stories close.

Hank wiped his eyes. “Last call,” he said, finally. “Not that anyone’s listening.”

Rusty stood, steady enough to pass inspection, and pulled some bills from his pocket.

“Worth it,” he said.

Chad slid off his stool, nearly missed the floor, and caught himself on the bar.

“Same time tomorrow?” he asked.

Hank shook his head. “It’s a weeknight.”

Chad smiled. “Exactly.”

The neon buzzed. The lights dimmed. Closing time did what it always does in Fort Stockton—arrived quietly, left a little unfinished, and promised nothing except the chance it might all happen again.



THIS WAS STORY NUMBER 1,000 ON THE BLOG!

IF YOU ENJOY THE DAILY READ PROVIDED HERE, THROW A LITTLE SOMETHING IN THE TIP JAR TO HELP DEFRAY THE COSTS AND MAKE THE CAPTAIN FEEL APPRECIATED.



22 responses to “CLOSING TIME”

  1. You know, while I don’t have a seat at the big table of the GFD, I feel like I have been there often, as a silent participant. I gotta admit that I have to resist the temptation to read each new story before my Folgers has been brewed in the AM. Anyway, each entry gives me a smile and many times a lot of laughs. (My favorite post is “Enough.”)

    Waiting for your crack at developing a Pynchon-esque tail. If you succeed in doing so, maybe you will be cast as a character with a bag over your head a la The Simpsons, the ultimate recognition.

    Keep them coming, Captain my Captain!

  2. So many similar stories in our collective C-M-C Community past-
    It seems our Captain has the talent to extract commonality within and among us.

    As many times as I’ve refueled, grabbed lunch or dinner, or overnighted in Fort Stockton, I almost feel I could be invited to the big round table

    Christmas week 1967 – my band’s pianist Stu’s fiancée, having visited his folks in NJ, invited me to their engagement party the following April. From an ad in Popular Mechanics, I drove/delivered someone else’s car (actually a retired NYC taxicab) to the New Orleans area. Stu and I took his future father-in-law’s new Pontiac wagon to retrieve the lingerie shower gifts at Delmonico’s on St Charles Ave. He tripped over the side door sill. I I was on my hands and knees stuffing “delicates” and cards back into packages when, in the days of micro-miniskirts, a mesmerizing smile, attached to a raven-haired statuesque goddess, started chatting with me. Before long, we were on the streetcar and headed to the French Quarter. I sat in on trumpet at several Bourbon Street jazz clubs. Late that evening, dropping her at her parents’ home, we agreed to go out the following day – and continued the next few evenings until, during dinner at her home, her father invited me fishing with then for the weekend at their place on the Louisiana coast. We married 14 months later, and despite health issues, old car tour and rallye navigation disputes, job changes, and cross country moves, my Bayou Lady and I’ll be closing in on our 57th anniversary this summer.

    Wishing Capitan, Buttercup, and Mia all the best for the coming times,
    and looking forward to the continuation of this most enjoyable blog,
    along with the comments of our community.

    Again, congrats on #1,000

    Marty

  3. Great story Cap! Congratulations on number 1,000; it was a doozy. Rusty’s story reminded me the night I met the future Mrs. Motcat. It was a Halloween party and I was 23. When I saw her walk in, I said to my friend next to me, “I’m going to marry that girl”. Celebrated 42nd anniversary last month.

  4. No one has chimed in yet about this, so maybe I’m the first: My story is pretty close to Rusty’s, except we made it to 55+ years. We met cruising in a “back-in-the-days” drive in: It was Bill Williams Drive In, in Houston. Life is really strange how things work out for the best!

  5. Hello all,

    When I read the Captain’s announcement that the 1K milestone on the blog was coming up, I was caught in a state much like when I eat a shrimp Po Boy sandwich, unobservant. I hadn’t been running a counter on the blog and was caught unprepared for the news. Since made aware, I had been counting down the days in anticipation of something extraordinarily special from the Captain as he planted his flag on the boundary of that era – not that everyday isn’t something extraordinary.
     
    So I was almost giddy as I went to the “Stories” button and then selected today’s entry. Then I read the entry’s name, “Closing Time”.  In the instant between when I clicked the button and the story appeared, my brain went to the dark side and I thought that the Captain might just be bringing his tenure as our muse to a close. Wouldn’t a bowing out at such a momentous achievement be the perfect time for goodbye? Though I realize the Captain seems to be more than just a man, he is really just like the rest of us in regard to how much of a daily burden he can carry. I’ve marveled at his abilities to assemble words in an artful way to amuse all of us out here.
     
    I read the opening lines of the story trying to suppress that notion even as I was fearing how the story might illuminate the departure. l continued on through the story with that battle running in my mind when I read about Chad dating the twins. Caught blind by the setup, my uncontrolled laughter banished the black thought from my mind.
     
    But the nag returned as I read to the end. I’m breathing easier now as I realize I had only invented the monster in my head and I can continue to get my daily recounting from The Fort into the future. Thank you Captain for not making my dark imaginings true.
     
    Oh! And congratulations Cap!

    Benard Marx  

  6. Holy Cow! I’ve endured a THOUSAND doses of this drivel!?! You’d think I’d be immune by this time, but no. Aside from crawling out of the sack every morning, I can’t think of any other discrete, voluntary activity I’ve performed 1,000 times over the last three years. Wait. OK, there’s that…and that… No, that doesn’t count. Only 789 pizzas — close, but no pepperoni. Slavish fan letters to Kate Beckinsale? Nah — in the low hundreds. Restraining orders? Too few to bother counting. BaT comments flagged as “non-constructive”? Let’s just say “Plenty” but nowhere near a grand.

    Quite a trip, Captain, and massive congratulations on the achievement! Still looking forward to cruising a patch of Route 66 with you in Perry’s Packard some fine day.

    • I think Perry’s Packard may be out of the question. But I could pick you up at the Airport in Amarillo and we could drive the old Route 66 as far as the Fairlane 500 could take us. (Spring or fall only. There’s no A/C hanging off that Mileage Maker Six.)

      I could entertain you with fictional, non-constructive stories about Kate along the way. Sister Thelma would blush. Trixie would just laugh and expound on the more provocative details. Chad would no longer dread getting old as a result. Angus Hopper could read the map and grumble about the cost of gas.

  7. Cute 1000th!
    Although, weeknight whiskey is frowned upon these days! Gerd and all
    Had two such chance incounters in my long distant past, sometimes wonder about those forks in the road
    Divine intervention I suppose, my guardian angel walks with a limp, as judgement was not in my chest or above my shoulders at the time…
    And memories tend to fog reality
    Especially 45 plus years later
    John Melloncamp once stated “never trust actors or song writers they are all liars.
    But sometimes you wonder about guys with car blogs
    Carrry on Cap

    • Dad slipped on some ice and fell, breaking his pelvis and other injuries. After being surgeoned on by Dr. Terry Trammell and more bone screws than can be reasonably comprehended by the mind of man, he found himself in a recovery ward with John Mellencamp’s mom. John visited her most every day…Dad said he was a nice guy.

      Happy #1000, Captain! When I think of all the time I occupied poring over your tales, I have to conclude that was probably the best spent time of my day.

      • Dad had been hospitalized, and when I visited, the gent in the other bed had a visitor as well. We were introduced to his long time friend Mario Andretti who was very gracious, sitting and chatting with all of us for nearly two hours until visiting hours were over. He was a delight, and a true gentleman.

        So interesting, how we get to cross paths.

      • “When I think of all the time I occupied poring over your tales, I have to conclude that was probably the best spent time of my day.” One captain to another…you might need to get out more.

        I appreciate you.

  8. Good Morning Captain, and congratulations on #1,000.
    Thanks for making my mornings more enjoyable,
    and a warm Howdy to all the C-M-C community,

    Marty

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